If I were to continue this extract I maybe would have delved deeper into the narrators mind of how they came to be in the unit and more of their background as Fowles delved into the mind of Clegg and explained to the reader how he came across Miranda and what attracted him to her.I would also have liked to experiment with the writing technique of the diary entries.
I put myself in here, no matter how hard they try and convince me I’m ill, I did this to myself! Theres a lot of gaps in my life that are just…black…They try and force it out of me. Their patronising grimaces and their condescending tone like I’m 5 years old. For my short dystopian story I have chosen to write about a slightly deranged individual in a mental institute having lived for weeks, maybe months in there, not really realising why.
I don’t care about hearing, seeing and smelling new things! The truth is, I don’t remember how I got in here in the first place. No one forced me like they say, I chose this life away from the danger and the people that couldn’t be trusted. They’re in the same situation as me, understand what I’m going through, it’s the other people I don’t like. And none of them will ever understand the trouble I went through to get here and my reasoning behind it. Analysis of “Denial.” I chose to write my story based on two of the main features of the book ‘The Collector’ by John Fowles – The writing style (the diary-type entries) and the idea of isolation and separation from society.
The narrator in my story is of similar vulnerability as they do not realize why they are in the institute, fairly unaware of their surroundings and no able to communicate with the other people there, not because he/she isn’t allowed to but because the narrator feels other people cannot be trusted.
Because I only created a short extract of a story from one day in the life of this narrator I am portraying I was unable to develop many of the writing styles I took from Fowles further.
They don’t realise how dangerous the outside world is. ‘Sunnyside Mental Care’ they call it, like it’s a ‘special’ place for people who are crazy. It’s not that I don’t like people, some of them in other white boxes seem nice enough.
I may forget things and refuse to talk or trust people but I’m not mental.
I’ve been waiting out the days, ticking them off, hoping someone will finally understand me but they never will. I have no friends, and the only family I have left are the ones that think I’m mental and everyone else is too preoccupied with their own lives to notice I’m still alive. The sea made me feel tiny, almost like I was invisible because no one could share my view of the world. Not much I grant you but enough to know that ‘necessities’ aren’t needed. The pronoun makes the staff seem almost inhuman making the story more tense as if the staff were making the individuals life a misery.
There was a time where I wasn’t scared of anything, when I had a bunch of friends who hung on my every word but then there was the time I could be surrounded by a sea of people and still feel all alone. Using the pronoun they shows the reader that even though the character has had to see these people everyday for weeks, maybe more, they are still anxious about how to socialise with them.
Process analysis writing is more than just a set of simple instructions.
As a writer, you must go beyond merely identifying the steps involved and examine that process with an analytical eye.